: Ok... I came up with something as well.
: "...We are servants of darkness, wielder of power,
: destroyer of the light. We shall kill all who stands
: before us..."
: Fetch Flavor Text
Fetch aren't really servants of the dark, if you equate the dark with the Leveller's side... They seem more affiliated with the old gods, or maybe the spider cult...
: "...Destroy, Kill, Consume..."
: Ghol Flavor Text
talk about short... good concept, but I've never seen a used flavor text that came even close to that short... I don't know how you could expand upon it though.
: "...To fear is to be a man. We must not lose fear,
: for fear conquers all - even the fear itself..."
: Journeyman Flavor Text
Again, rather short, but also again, good concept... Expand upon it, and rethink the "fear conquers all" bit... the absence of fear may make it impossible to do certain things, but I don't think many people think that the fear itself can really do much for you... Here's something that, while totally different, has the same concept behind it:
"Courage... is not the lack of fear; He who fears nothing is a fool. True courage... the kind that makes us who we are, that defines us as human... is having fear, acknowlodging that fear, and facing it still, without despair in your heart."
: "...'T'is seems we 're outnumbered, laddie.'
: Thewyn's words were instantly replied by a young
: berserk. 'More the better! We can kill them all at
: once!'..."
: Berserk Flavor Text
first of all, 'tis "'tis", not "t'is," and second of all, "'tis" means "it is," while you're using it here as "it". Also, while you again have a good concept, the flavor is worded a bit weakly... Again, I would rethink it, and write it down a little differently.
: What do you guys thinks?
Pretty good ideas, just don't forget the editing! =)
Domy!
