: Personally, I think the Avatara (and hence the Nine) are
: Archmages, powerful sorcerers/wizards/mages (I prefer
: mages for the generic, but that's just my call) that
: may or may not be specially devoted to the Light and
: Wyrd, or the One Dream, in and of itself.
Again, I see no reason why this can’t be true. In this context I see words like sorcerer, archmage, wizard, etc., as synonyms as well. They all seem to represent in a general sense, someone who is skilled in the use of magic. Not an amateur. Similarly, I see no reason to think that all members of the avatara had to feel the same way about everything. For example, certainly somewhere along the way Myrdred turned on the avatara and fell in with the ranks of the dark. However, while I couldn’t comment on what god or higher power all the avatara served, while active as avatara, they all seemed to share the same goal of fighting the dark. Mazzarin died fighting the Watcher. The Nine devoted themselves to stopping Balor. It can even be assumed that as an avatara of Connacht, Myrdred must have fought the dark alongside Connacht until he turned and presumably left the order.
As for your fiction, I read your Journal fiction in the Fan Creations section, as well as the flavor texts that a quick search of the Asylum would provide. The link to your tale of Six Wolf in the Fan Creations sections doesn’t appear to be working correctly. Stylistically and structurally your Journal entries and flavor texts seem jive well with the lore and atmosphere of the originals that they emulate. The only suggestion I can make for future Journal entries would be to begin to shift focus away from the characters surrounding the Journal’s author, and more toward the author himself. By it’s very nature a journal is a work that reflects it’s author’s mood and feelings more than anything else. The flavor texts are fine sticking simply to dialogue or exposition, but in the Journal entries I would like to see you explore more of the psyche of the author. To understand his motives. All too often in works of fan fiction, a one-dimensional protagonist is simply given a new setting and an army of faceless, stock villains to slaughter. However, the angle of having the story told from the protagonist’s journal, his thoughts to himself, lends itself to greater character depth I feel. I think what you have now is good, but I think you could go deeper.
-Phil.
