: Myrk flavor text: "Two moons come,
: We start the feeding,
: When the day is gone,
: The weaklings are bleeding."
Good! I rly do like it! just one eensy suggestion, mb just get rid of the "the" in the third line ("When day is gone")
: Berserk Flavor Text: " There is only one thing Ý
: cannot fight with...death...Ý cannot fight it because
: the sword cannot cleave something not tangible...Ýt
: drains your breath...your stamina...yourself.. One way
: to escape it though, elude it...But Ý cannot do it...A
: berserk is not of his kind if backstabbing is the way
: he chooses..."
It's pretty good, overall; but, for a berserk? A bit too philosophical.
: Trow flavor text: "You may hit me a thousand
: times...But you will not achieve it... to expect the
: death of a titan just by reckless attacks is the one
: and only example of true stupidity... Ý will not slay
: you because Ý do not take any pleasure in killing
: something whose life is meaningless..."
mmm... again, good... but getting a bit to personal. You don't see other flavor texts where the species is actively bragging about itself.
: Moagim Flavor Text: "You can have the power to slay
: me... the young one...but there is no possibility in
: preventing the existance of the horned nightmare...Yet
: Ý assure you...in every malice... within every act of
: treachery...we will meet again."
Don't have any idea about in relation to the story of M3 (still need to get the game); but not bad... just one thing. You're delving too deep into "...". Sure, one or two ellipses are good, but you had six in that last flavor.
Good imagination! I like your style, too.
dm.
PS: (I know this is slightly cocky, but I do take some pride in my own writing abilities (I plan on becoming an author, full time, when I get into and out of college), and I really do like your style. It's very good.)
