: nb, but, if this is supposed to be in journal briefing
: style, a little overly choppy in style towards the
: end; the traditional journal style has more flowing
: clauses. I know I'm being picky. Sue me.
The litigation papers should arrive shortly. I am prepared to settle early, but only at the price of half of your net worth. That does include the Swiss bank accounts.
: PS: BTW, when exactly does this story take place?
: (relative to other events in the Myth world)
It takes place in the Mythical time when I was da Komit and with every breath my account filled with more and more pointz. Those were the days. :\
Btw, I liked your story, and I have some suggestions. My personal pet peeve is when people only use one or two types of sense. How did the pain feel for the zerk when the fetch hit him? Was there a stench surrounding the thrall? Did the nearby zerks hear the loud crack of lightnening? Was his trusty blade esay to wield through the lines of thrall or was it ardous work?
When writing a story try to be able to picture every element of a story, and at least have it in your mind. 'Tis a good tale though...I'll be waiting for the next installment. :)
