: I still don't like trhe two after's. Try from instead of
: the second one.
Alright...minor edit.
: Too nows also sounds a bit off. just get rid of the
: second one.
minor edit...
: Get rid of the to before towards. The use of citadel
: twice is quite irritating which is why I think I
: suggested something else in a previous post. It's up
: to you though.
hmmm...the Tower of the Avatara or something. I'll change it.
: Other than a few doubled up words. Very nice.
Thanks. Great editing work.
: I don't need it, but it would be nice.
: I don't know why you'd worry about people knowing your
: name. Even if they were untustworthy. It's your choice
: though. Email it to me so it's more concealed from
: prying eyes of forum lamers. Granted it'll be on the
: fan fiction site but chances are, they won't find
: that.
: Once again. Good job. Oh and check the news to see what
: Forrest was on about.
I'm not really worried about it, but with a name like mine someone with the maturity level of a lamer would be making fun of it.
Security wise, I'm much more worried about my e-mail address, but it doesn't seem to be a problem.
so do I send you an e-mail is the edited story or what?
I don't know how to upload stuff online.
Seraph
